To: Brad Blackstone
From: Boris Khoo
Date: 21 September 2016
Subject: Introduction of Myself and My Educational Goals and Aims
Dear Brad,
I am Boris Khoo from the telematics class of TLM1010. I am writing this email to introduce myself and to explain to you about my educational background, my interests, my goals for studying Telematics and my aims for the future.
Usually when I introduce myself, people would ask me : "Are you a russian"? "Why do you have russian name as your first name?". My reply to them is that I don't look like a russian and I am not a russian. I have a russian name because my parents wanted a unique name for me. Therefore they decided to name me after someone great who's name is Boris Yasin. One of the Russia's president after the cold war ended.
During my free time I would go for a jog around the park, play sports like tennis and dodgeball and also trying out new programming software that is available online. I really enjoy sports as it really bonds people together.
I previously studied electronic and computer engineering in Ngee Ann Polytechnic, specialised in computer mobile technology. That’s where I found my interest in programming. Since then I have done a lot of programming related to the Android platform.
The reason why I joined the telematics course is to find out more about the current transportation network, driverless cars and how programming could be used in making transportation better. Also I want to find out about what is people’s views on the current transportation. So far I find this course challenging. I was expected to understand the steps to a problem rather than remembering the solution. I aim to make transportation more user friendly by using my skills that I will be imparted with.
I hope you would get to know me better after reading this short introduction.
Yours sincerely,
Boris Khoo
Revised on : 29 September 2016
Commented on: Jia wei and Zakirah blog
Thanks for the formal introduction, Boris. You start this letter out with a clear overview statement. You also provide clear information throughout the letter. Your background is interesting.
ReplyDeleteI do have one question related to the content of your letter. You state that your parents named you after "someone great." Who? Boris is just the first name? What was the famous person's family name?
There are also a few (minor) language issues for you to take note of:
1) capitalization: There are many words in this letter that do not need caps: Telematics, Tennis, Electronic and Computer Engineering, Sincerely, etc.
See this website for an explanation: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/42/
2) sentence structure:
Usually when I introduce myself, others would ask me am I Russian? >>> (wrong structure)
3) dont >>> (spelling)
I appreciate your sharing.
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ReplyDeleteDear Boris,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your email, I have a better understanding of your interest and goals.Your description of why u choose to study telematics is detailed and clear.
I wish you all the best in your future endeavours!
Regards,
Syafiq
Dear Boris,
ReplyDeleteYour introduction allowed me to better understand you are.
It was interesting to know how your name came from.
The structure of the email was alright, and your introduction was easy to read and understand.
I hope to get to better know you, when I see you during classes.
Regards,
WeiSheng
Dear Brad,
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting on my formal email post. I have done the following changes according to your comments.
Regrads,
Boris
Dear Boris,
ReplyDeleteIt is great to hear that you are into sports too but as your interest, i wonder if you had join any competition or contribution to the school with the sports that you have played?
It is an great opportunity if we could have a friendly match with each another through tennis.
hope to get to know you better after awhile.
Regards,
Marilyn